What do you think in a poetics opinion?
Here I sit, on my bed
With this gun held tightly to my head.
I clentch my fingers
Hold my breath
Hoping God will pay his respect
All the things I’ve tried to say
You block out like there is no today
So what am I to do
When their is no one to help see me through
Your the one whom held me within
Yet you given birth to my sins
I don’t see how this could be
Letting him put his hands all over me
I am just a kid, too young to understand
Your just a mom who doesn’t know where to begin
Yet I know damn well where you stand, because it has happened over, and over agian.
So let’s go back to where I am
With this gun held tightly to my head
I close my eyes
Hold my breath
Pull the trigger with many regrets
I hope you see what you did to me
And know that I was carrying his seed.
just so every one knows, this was how I felt. It helps to write it out. That is where all of my writings come from. Things that have happened to me. I live a great life now. Have 3 kids, married. I resolved all my issues. Yet, I still write about how I felt.
Answer by leah j
I think that this is a very sad poem, and for me I found it very unerveing.
I have kinda the same experince as what was being descibed in this poem, so I could really relate to it. I like how your words flowed so nicely, and I think you did a very good job at writing somthing that is very hard for alot of people to write!
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